Rickard A. Parker ([log in to unmask]) wrote the following on Wed, Mar 03, 2010 at 04:06:11PM -0500:
> > Why can't it just be a door knob?  That would tie into the
> > "hand on the door," the image of "vacant shuttles (who) weave
> > the wind" through the halls.  (I'm not saying it's *literally*
> > a house, but to me the imagery needs its internal consistency.)
> 
> How about this then? Read:
>    An old man in a draughty house
>    Under a windy knob.
> like this:
>    An old man in a house full of draught beer
>    Passed out under a keyhole under the door knob
>    Passing wind.
> 
> Take no offense.  I'm working on a serious post with this
> but, although it will be better, it will still lack some
> consistency as I'm still trying to figure out this poem.

*grin*.  You and all of the rest of us, I think.