> Why can't it just be a door knob? That would tie into the
> "hand on the door," the image of "vacant shuttles (who) weave
> the wind" through the halls. (I'm not saying it's *literally*
> a house, but to me the imagery needs its internal consistency.)
How about this then? Read:
An old man in a draughty house
Under a windy knob.
An old man in a house full of draught beer
Passed out under a keyhole under the door knob
Take no offense. I'm working on a serious post with this
but, although it will be better, it will still lack some
consistency as I'm still trying to figure out this poem.